“‘What the f***?’ She said it a third time, a fourth time, a fifth time it didn’t matter...” (pg 128) because this book still sucked.
I feel bad, because I’m sure the author put a lot of work into this piece, but it wasn’t for me. The way things were worded was so strange. And it was hard to tell if he was trying to create (unnecessarily) detailed images for the reader, or if he wanted to prove that he has a “large” vocabulary. For example, the first few pages in themselves are wack, but more specifically he wrote, “...latissimus dorsi...which she loved to sink her fingers into.”
Lol stop. Just say “back.” You made it weird. Rumaan, be real with me. Would you rather hear, “she kissed his neck” or “she kissed his sternocleidomastoid”? Cmon man.
Or even later in the book, when you thought it was JUST getting to the good part and they heard a “noise” in the woods and he repeated the SAME THING 40 times. I stopped reading because I was so annoyed. GET TO THE POINT. It reminded me of the Spongebob episode where Mr Krabs says, “The smell. The smelly smell. The smelly smell that smells, smelly.” Now read that type of literature for 200 pages and you have this book. That is all.