If this book were edited, I would likely give it 4 stars (maybe even 5). But it is so difficult to read and understand, that I nearly gave up after the first or second chapter. Instead, I started it over and made corrections on my Kindle. I HAD to make the corrections, sometimes literally in order to figure out who was talking, and who they were speaking to. Two stars is a full star more than I'd have given this book, if I hadn't corrected the errors in order to know WHAT THE DICKENS the author is saying, who is speaking, and sometimes even what the subject is.
After fighting through 2 chapters, my options had been either to give up, or to start over, and correct every error. I started over. There is not one page that didn't have either a grammatical error, or something that makes it impossible to know who is speaking. While doing the corrections, I found myself liking the story itself, and liking the way that the author helps us to connect with the characters. But WITHOUT the corrections, I felt totally lost. Clueless. Confused. In one paragraph, he makes a statement that is enclosed in double quotation marks, followed by a sentence enclosed in single quotations marks, continues with a statement that somewhat clarifies what the person is thinking that is not a quote, then ends with a sentence enclosed in single quotation marks.
I am now here reviewing it, with two hopes. One is that the author will CORRECT the errors. Once I complete reading it and send him my copy of his book, maybe he'll consider making corrections. My other hope, is that people won't be put off by my pitiful 2 star review ( which is actually a full star more than I'd have given it, if I hadn't corrected the errors in order to know WHAT THE DICKENS the author is saying, who is speaking, and sometimes even what the subject is). Without commas, complete sentences, and indented paragraphs, this book is, in my opinion, not readable.
I'm hoping that the author will continue to write (I ACTUALLY LIKED THIS STORY) ... but will consider accepting that HE may not need simple things like commas and either indenting or putting a space between paragraphs, as well as having complete sentences. He is a story teller, for sure. But story WRITING is the goal, yes? Get yourself an editor, young man. Or even just a grammar checker on your word processor.