Have to agree with Philip Doorbar. Totally unrealistic portrayal of the interactions between the ranks - it simply was not like that. Ever. For an Erk to even approach an Officer in the way depicted would have resulted in a very swift F252 fizzer and an equally swift award of 2 weeks jankers!
As for the story itself, that is fine, but sadly let down by the technical issues.
Great visual effects.
Had research been done into inter-ranks protocol, the overall effect would have been so much better!